The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The first bar chart illustrates the proportion of computer possession
of
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individuals in five
years
with two-year intervals between 2002 and 2010 and the second bar graph presents the fraction of a variety of groups of learners owning computers between the
years
2002 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the trend of computer ownership increases throughout the record;
moreover
, postgraduates possess PCs the most compared to others.
To begin
with, the percentage of computer ownership in 2002 was around 55% and shot up by 5% in the next two
years
. A minimal rise was seen in 2006 to 65% and inclined again to a massive 70% in 2008 before reaching the highest point in 2010, with roughly a gigantic 75%. What is interesting to note is the first year was less than the
last
year by approximately 1.5 times. On the flip side, the ratio in 2002 of no high school diploma occupied a meagre 10% and the trajectory went up
every
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levels
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level
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of education. Both Bachelor's degree and postgraduate qualification in 2002 registered at 70% and 80% respectively.
Furthermore
, in 2010, the first group surged to 40%
while
both the
last
two groups soared by a nominal 20%. What is surprising to see is the no diploma group increased by 4 times in eight
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • computer ownership
  • percentage of the population
  • level of education
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • no-qualification
  • secondary
  • post-secondary
  • graduate education
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancement
  • accessibility
  • demographics
  • statistical data
  • data interpretation
  • significant growth
  • fluctuations
  • proliferation
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