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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her explain how to apply for the job Write at least 150 words.

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Dear John, I hope you're doing great,
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 writing
this
 message to let you know that
i
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 found what
have
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you asked for me regarding finding a
job
 for you. Recently,
me
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and
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my brother Ahmed were chatting about helping you
in finding
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 a proper
job
 , and we saw a post on
X
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platform, showing that a local company in my country is looking for
' Marketing
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Spicialist'
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Specialist
, with little
experince
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experience
on
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in
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advertisig
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advertising
campings
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campaigns
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. I think
this
job
 is great for you, because as far as I know
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this
 company is really good
in
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at
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 offering high
incoms
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incomes
income
, and other
valueable
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valuable
 features for you.As well , it
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will
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 cover your
accomandition
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accommodation
 so you should n't worry about that. I will send
to
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you the link for
this
job
 application, all you have to do is to open the link and submit the
requiered
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required
 information. If you need any help please tell me, Nouf Best wishes,
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Grammar and Spelling
Check spelling and grammar to improve clarity and professionalism. Consider using spellcheck tools or proofreading your letter before sending it.
Structure
Ensure each paragraph introduces and develops a single idea for better readability. For example, separate the job's details and its suitability into distinct paragraphs.
Greeting and Closing
You have provided a clear introduction and closing, which adds to the letter's overall coherence.
Task Achievement
You answered all parts of the task effectively, mentioning the job, explaining its suitability, and detailing how to apply for it.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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