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Some people say that governments are responsible for dealing with environmental issues. other people believe that it is the individual's responsibility to take action to protect the environment.

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Nowadays, almost 90
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 of the world is facing environmental problems,
such
 as air pollution, water pollution and global warming. Most
people
 believe that governments are responsible for dealing with environmental
issues
.
While
 there is a different segment of society which believes that
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individuals
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 are responsible
to take
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for taking
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 action to protect the environment.
This
 essay will look into both points of view. One reason, why
people
 believe that governments should be held responsible
to deal
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 with environmental
issues
 is that
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 they have the authority and power to do so.
People
 ruling the nation can make laws to reduce the use of fossil fuel power stations and promote the use of renewable sources,
such
 as hydropower stations; which would lead to less carbon dioxide emissions.
Moreover
, they have the capital to invest in eco-friendly technology, like installing
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 of solar panels; which could drastically reduce
green house
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 gas emissions.
On the contrary
, there are many
people
 who believe that
individual's
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individuals
individual
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 should be held responsible to deal with environmental
issues
, and one reason for
that is
 change is only possible at the grassroots level. They believe if
individual's
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 come together and start awareness programmes about littering, and waste reduction, change itself will occur. If
people
 just start caring about the environment and realize how precious it is, most of the environmental
issues
 would be solved. In conclusion, there is no doubt that
individual's
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 should protect the environment;
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 firmly believe that governments can make a huge difference. They can highly invest in green technology, and implement policies to make a meaningful environmental change.
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task achievement
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting both viewpoints clearly and offering a conclusion that supports one side while acknowledging the importance of the other.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-defined, providing a clear framework for the essay. This helps the reader understand the structure and main points of your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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