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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2023.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2023.
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The given bar charts illustrate the cost in order to
to
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travel from Sydney to
Melbourne
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 and go back by air during 2 weeks in 2013.
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, it can be seen that the price to get to
Melbourne
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 tended to be higher than the other way around,
evethough
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even though
 the disparities were not significant.
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,
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tickets'
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tickets
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 costs at the peak time of
friday
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Friday
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 to
monday
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Monday
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 were more than other weekdays in both weeks. Regarding the first week when the costs were more substantial, plane
tickets
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 taking off from Sydney
costed
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cost
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 about 80$ on
monday
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Monday
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 which dropped by
a
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half for the next 3 days before recovering to over 70$ once again by
saturday
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.
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, the
sunday's
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tickets
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 decreased to 50$, similar to backward
tickets
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 from
Melbourne
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 for the same day. As for the ticket
come
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 from
Melbourne
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, it started at roughly 60$ on
monday
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Monday
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 prior to a considerable decline of 50%,
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 the rest of the week the price reached a high at more or less 80$ on
friday
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Friday
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 and
begin
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began
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 going down. Looking at the remaining week with
a
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an
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 insignificant price, the cost for either way ranged from approximately 30$ to double that amount, excluding Sydney to
Melbourne
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friday
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Friday
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tickets
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 which were more than 70$.

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