The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2023.

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The given bar charts illustrate the cost in order to

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travel from Sydney to

Melbourne

and go back by air during 2 weeks in 2013.

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, it can be seen that the price to get to

Melbourne

tended to be higher than the other way around,

evethough

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even though

the disparities were not significant.

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tickets'

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costs at the peak time of

friday

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monday

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were more than other weekdays in both weeks. Regarding the first week when the costs were more substantial, plane

tickets

taking off from Sydney

costed

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about 80$ on

monday

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which dropped by

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half for the next 3 days before recovering to over 70$ once again by

saturday

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Nevertheless

, the

sunday's

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tickets

decreased to 50$, similar to backward

tickets

from

Melbourne

for the same day. As for the ticket

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from

Melbourne

, it started at roughly 60$ on

monday

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prior to a considerable decline of 50%,

whereas

the rest of the week the price reached a high at more or less 80$ on

friday

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and

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going down. Looking at the remaining week with

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insignificant price, the cost for either way ranged from approximately 30$ to double that amount, excluding Sydney to

Melbourne

friday

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tickets

which were more than 70$.

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