The chart shows different level of post-school qualifications in Australia
The given graph illustrates the comparison of after-graduate qualifications in Australia and the percentages of
males
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females
who held them in 1999.
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for male Skilled Vocational Use synonyms
Diploma
hit the highest point. Use synonyms
Besides
, except for the Bachelor's Degree and the Undergraduate Linking Words
Diploma
, the percentages of Use synonyms
males
were higher than Use synonyms
females
.
In terms of Use synonyms
data
for the Skilled Vocational Use synonyms
Diploma
, there was a big difference Use synonyms
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males
with 90% and Use synonyms
females
with 10%. Regarding the figure for the Undergraduate Use synonyms
Diploma
, the amount of Use synonyms
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females
was 70%, twice as much as that of Use synonyms
male
with 35%. Fix the agreement mistake
males
While
the Linking Words
data
of Use synonyms
males
for Bachelor's Degree was 45%, the figure of Use synonyms
females
was 5% higher.
Compared to the number of Use synonyms
females
, the Use synonyms
data
of Use synonyms
males
was higher than Use synonyms
females
in the Postgraduate Use synonyms
Diploma
with Use synonyms
the
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figure
is 70% and 30%. Fix the agreement mistake
figures
Finally
, the Masters Degree was held by more Linking Words
males
than Use synonyms
females
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there was only 40% for Linking Words
females
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