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Writing Samples
Band 7

You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you have been working. In your letter describe the work you have been doing explain why you can no longer do this work recommend another person who is interested in the work

Dear Mr Smith, I worked as a volunteer for more than 5 years. We were helping street animals
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find homes. I really love
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 job. In 2 weeks, I'm moving to Florida because I won a green card. At least, I will never forget how I helped to find the owners of the first dog I rescued. My favourite thing to do so far has been feeding them. They are very joyful.
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, I remember when I was feeding the dog on the street, and she was so happy that she walked with me to my house. Now she has a home, and her name is Niki, and in 2 weeks she is going to Florida with me.
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, it's very hard for me to say goodbye to
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 job, but that's how it happened.
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, I've already found a replacement for myself.
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 is my best friend, Ksenia. She loves dogs and always saves them. She is very responsible and has a kind heart. I have already told her everything about how and what needs to be done; she is waiting impatiently. If you allow, she will work
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 of me, and I will bring her to the interview. I’m looking forward to hearing from you. Sincerely yours, Laza Alina

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Start with a clear line that says what you did and when you must stop.
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Make one idea in each paragraph and use simple links to join ideas.
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Keep short and simple sentences and fix small grammar.
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You show care for the dogs and love your work.
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You name a person who can take over, which helps the team.
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