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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •Say how important New year is to people in your country •describe how New year is celebrated in your country •explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Elsa I hope
this
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 letter will help your college project and
i
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also
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 should really say that I'm glad to beg
me
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 for your project Well, the New
Year
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 is significant for people in my country because relatives can get together again around the table and spend their
times
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 happily with each other. People always make wishes at that time and believe that
New
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the New
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year
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Year
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 is coming with new achievements, by the
way
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way,
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 they
do planning
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 new things for their
works
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 that they should be done in the new
year
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. The first thing
i
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 should maintain is that New
Year
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 offers a chance to set new goals, make
resalutions
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resolutions
 and envision a better future In my
countries
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country
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, New
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year's
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Year's
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eve
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Eve
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 is celebrated with dancing, eating, drinking, and watching or lighting fireworks. Every New
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year's
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 Eve my mom and
i
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 cook unusual foods ,before that we learn about how to cook these.
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 everyone
try
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tries
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 new foods that we make.we decorate our house with
type
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types
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 of tournaments before few a days. Sometimes we visit our loved ones who
lives
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 far away. People usually let off
rocket
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, children circle around the fir tree. I am aware of New
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year'
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Year'
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 history that's why
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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muslims
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Muslims
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 in my country don't celebrate the New
Year
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i
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I
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 think. I would say that
New
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the New
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Year
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 holiday is one of my favourites. The best thing
i
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I
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 like
that
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is that
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 everyone
get
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gets
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 together and
forget
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 grief and sorrow at that moment. And
this
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 is how we celebrate
in
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apply
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New
Year
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's Eve If you need
a
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help you can ask me and whatever
happens
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happens,
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 I'll help you Yours faithfully, Lily

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coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
In a formal letter, it's better to avoid using contractions like 'i'm' and ensure proper capitalization such as 'I'.
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The letter has a friendly and engaging tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
task achievement
The content provides a complete response to the prompt, covering all required points.
coherence and cohesion
The letter starts with a warm greeting and ends with a polite closing, maintaining a good structure.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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