Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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introduction
Your introduction needs to be clearer and more concise. Try to introduce the topic and present both viewpoints in a straightforward manner.
structure
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea, and use transition words to improve the logical flow of your essay.
details
Expand on your ideas with more specific examples and details to make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
language
Pay attention to grammar and vocabulary to ensure your ideas are communicated clearly and accurately.
content
You have attempted to discuss both views, which is essential for this type of essay.
structure
You included a conclusion that summarizes your main points, which shows an understanding of essay structure.
Fully explain your ideas
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.
