The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990, and 2000.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990, and 2000.
The given three pie charts illustrate differences in yearly
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spending
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by local officials in Someland between 1980, 1990 and 2000. The biggest
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is higher education and it stayed
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. Transportation changed too much. Higher education was 35
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in 1980. After
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, it
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increased
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in ten
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and it decreased to 40
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in 2000. Sector k-12 education had been 25
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when started. It fell a very small number
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then
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it decreased again and it was 18
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in 2000. Transportation was 16
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when it started and that had a
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decrease in 1990. But it climbed with
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increase from 6
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to 22
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in
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decade. Health and human resources
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14
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when it started
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, it grew 6
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in 1990 but it
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back to
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. Environmental services had been 4
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when it started in 1980. After that, it grew but it
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the chart. It rose again and it reached
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. And
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sectors the smallest
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in 1980 and it
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decreased
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. When it came to 2000, it was 1
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in the pie chart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocation of budget
  • percentage distribution
  • annual spending
  • local authorities
  • sectors
  • increased funding
  • decreased funding
  • trends
  • socio-economic conditions
  • policies
  • expenditure
  • public services
  • financial priorities
  • budgetary adjustments
  • fiscal policies
  • discretionary spending
  • mandatory spending
  • inflation-adjusted
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