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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is
forcasted
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forecasted
 that, buses and
trucks
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 will be
self driving
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 in the future. If that happens, it can be advantageous for numerous reasons,
such
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 as
,
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 road safety.
However
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, there are some problems
as
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,
expanses
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 of these automobiles. In my opinion, despite having some difficulties, driverless
cars
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 can bring about more good than bad. These
vehicals
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vehicles
 typically run a long distance in a single trip, sometimes spanning days.
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, its drivers become tired and prone to make mistakes. But with artificial
inteligence
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intelligence
 driven
cars
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 will not need rest and make accidents less
frequently
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. The driverless
cars
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 and
semi
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semi-trucks
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trucks
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 that are cruising the street can be used as an example.
According to
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 Tesla, their
cars
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 were
involed
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involved
 in less than 50 accidents in
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last
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the last
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 5 years, which is unbelievable when compared to traditional
cars
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.
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,people will be able to cherish their car rides more. As they will not have to drive themselves, they can listen to music,
take
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rest,
even
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and even
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 eat foods like pasta
on
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 the
cars
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. Chinese electrical
vehical
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vehicle
 manufacturer BYD even boasted in their yearly magazine cover expressing,
5
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that 5
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% of their customers who travel in
consequtive
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consecutive
 days, sleep in the car regularly.
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, making
this
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cars
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inteligent
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intelligent
 is an expansive and difficult
endavour
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endeavour
.
Lot
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 of research needs to be done, many new parts have to be invented,
numerous
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 infrastructures
needs
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 to be built
such
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 as recharge stations.
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 will ramp up the price of these automobiles. In turn, the goods transported by these
trucks
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 or
tickets price
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ticket prices
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 for them will be more costly than traditional ones.
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, driverless
cars
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such
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 as Tesla Roadstar cost 8 times more than a similar capacity
oil run
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 car. In conclusion, in
future
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peoples’
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role
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roles
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 will be restricted as passengers, as
trucks
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 and buses will have no drivers. There are concerns about the price of these
cars
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,
as well as
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 the products transported by them. But I believe
this
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 will be a
a
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massive milestone for humanity
outweighting
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outweighing
out weighting
 any disadvantages.

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grammar
There are a few grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. Be mindful of these, as they can distract the reader. For instance, 'expanses' should be 'expenses', and 'vehicals' should be 'vehicles'.
sentence structure
Some sentences are awkwardly structured. For example, 'their cars were involed in less than 50 accidents in last 5 years, which is unbelievable when compared to traditional cars' could be revised to 'their cars were involved in fewer than 50 accidents over the last 5 years, which is an impressive record compared to traditional cars.'
detail
While your main points are clear, you could elaborate more on each point to strengthen your argument. Providing additional relevant examples and expanding on the current ones would enhance the depth of your response.
coherence
Your essay could benefit from smoother transitions between paragraphs. For example, starting a paragraph with 'Additionally,' instead of 'Additionally,people' will make the transitions more natural.
balanced argument
You've done well in presenting a balanced view by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
essay structure
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame your essay, clearly stating your opinion and summarizing your points.
examples
You have included relevant and specific examples, such as those from Tesla and BYD, which effectively support your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous
  • driverless
  • human error
  • congestion
  • mobility
  • independence
  • energy-efficient
  • pollution
  • fossil fuel
  • economic impact
  • infrastructure
  • maintenance
  • insurance
  • psychological benefits
  • hacking
  • data privacy
  • ethical programming
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