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The table and pỉe charts illustrate data about the police funding in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.

The table and pỉe charts illustrate data about the police funding in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.
The table and pỉe charts illustrate data about
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police funding in 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The sources of
money
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 are shown in the table and the pie chart depicts the distribution of the
money
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.
Overall
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, total
money
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 increased slightly, incomes mostly came from national authorities and the
money
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 distribution mainly concentrated on salaries for officers and staff. There was a slight increase in
total
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the total
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of
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law enforcement funding which was 304.7
million
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 in 2017 and
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 to 318.6
million
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 in 2018.
National
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The national
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 government donated 175.5
million
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 in 2017 and 177.8
million
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 in 2018.
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 was followed by Local taxes, at 91.2
million
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 in 2017 and increased by over 10% the following year.
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 amount of
money
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 from other sources was 38
million
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 and 38.5
million
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 in 2017 and 2018, respectively. As
regard
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 how the
money
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 was allocated, salaries for officers and staff accounted for 75 % in 2017 and slightly decreased to 69% in 2018. Facilities expense was the second largest dominated at 17 % which was unchanged for 2 years. Meanwhile, technologies
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 not popular among 3 topics,
however
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, the amount of
money
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 invested in technologies was 8% in 2017 and
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increased
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 significantly to 14% in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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