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Task 1: The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph indicates how much goods were exported from
Australia
 to four various
country
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 over a twenty-year period. It can be clearly seen that there was an upward trend for the
exportation
 to
china
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China
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 from
Australia
.
However
,the percentage of
exportation
for
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from
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 other countries experienced a moderate change over the period. As regards
to
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China,the average of staff transportation
initiated
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increased
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at
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to
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 just under %5 in 1990 and
then
 It increased modestly near %15 in 2007.Surprisingly,the average
of
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exportation
 rocketed
at
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to
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 roughly %29
at the end
 of the trend in 2012.(Which was the highest amount of
exportation
 over the whole
years
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year
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).
Moreover
,the percentage of selling out from
Australia
 to India levelled off
approximately
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1per
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1 per
 cent between 1990 to 2000.For the twelve next
year's
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year
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 It witnessed a gradual rise and reached
to
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%5 in 2012.
Additionally
,the average of selling staff from
Australia
 to the US fluctuated during the period and in 1990,It started at just over %10 and with a slight decline reached
to
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nearby
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nearly
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 5 per cent in 2012.
In addition
,in 1990,the
amount
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number
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 of goods which were exported from
Australia
 to Japan was %25 and It faced a modest fall and
at the end
 of the graph hit the bottom to just around 18 per cent in 2012.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, exportation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "modestly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Export percentages
  • Significant trends
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Relative distribution
  • Global economic changes
  • Trade agreements
  • Shifts in demand
  • Market dynamics
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Bilateral trade relations
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