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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population of four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the graph provided reveals the ratio of
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population
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the population
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 of the Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and Indonesia living in cities during a period of 50 years from 1970 and 2020 with extra predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, one particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure is that by far the highest rate of
population
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 belongs to
Malaysia
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.
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, the lowest proportion of
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population
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the population
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 is related to
Thailand
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the portion of
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population
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the population
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 of
Thailand
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 and Indonesia is lower than 30% ,
while
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 that of the Philippines and
Malaysia
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 is more than 30% up to 2000.
In addition
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, the trends of Indonesia and
Malaysia
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 have wild fluctuations and those of both countries are upward.
Furthermore
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, the trends of the proportion of the Philippines and
Thailand
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 have slight fluctuations and those of both countries are upward.
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, it is reasonable to summarize that the ratio of the total
population
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 of four different Asian countries will increase by more than 40% up by 2040.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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