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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea ora waste of time?

#students #gap #year #university #travel #gain #work #idea #ora #waste #time
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the
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statement
 that some pupils
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 to one
year
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break
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 before starting university, to
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either
 travel or gain new
eperience
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experience
experiences
 related to work. I
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think
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 It is a great idea to take a
year
 gap before starting university for two important reasons and I will outline it in
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 essay. first and foremost,
traveling
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 can teach you many life skills that you are going to use in your future
acadmeic
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academic
 life.
for instance
, you might learn how to be more
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 in life and that not
every thing
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 that you are wishing for can be possible.
secondly
,
while
 you are on your trip to other countries you are going to face many
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 throughout your journey and you have to solve
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 and that will enhance
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 ability to be more responsible.
furthermore
, you have the option to stay in your country and learn more about the subject that you are willing to attend and learn more about it by getting
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 the field and
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 more knowledge.
For example
, If you want to attend design classes you should work with fashion companies and familiarize
youself
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yourself
 with the industry in that
year
 gap. In conclusion, I believe It is crucial to take a
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 gap before starting
univestiy
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university
 to travel and explore other cultures that can improve certain skills, and the other option is to
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familiarize
youself
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yourself
 with the industry and that will make studying much easier.
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grammar
Your introduction sets up the topic well, but there are numerous grammar and spelling errors throughout the essay. Aim to proofread your essay before submission or practice writing with a focus on accuracy.
elaboration
Introduce more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This will help to provide a more compelling and persuasive argument.
structure
The essay structure is clear, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, more detailed explanations and transitions between ideas would enhance coherence.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a nice frame for your arguments.
content
You present several valid points in favor of taking a gap year, showing an understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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