Some people think that to learn a second language well, it is necessary to live in the country where that language is spoken. What is your opinion about this?

To learn a new
language
some people
thinks
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that it is important to learn the
language
at the original state.
However
,
leaning
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new
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a new
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language
its
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depend
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on practicing not being abroad to learn it.
To begin
with
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learning
new
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language
they should
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it and
registering
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in
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to keep tracking the process and not
to
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lose it. Because by learning and
practicing
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with
certified
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a certified
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and professional
instructor
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will
assure
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the perfect way to learn.
For example
, if you want to learn a
language
first of all you will search
about
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the best experience by asking your family, friends or
your
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colleagues about the center.
Then
you will try to visit, to take more information and
then
you will register after the good reviews.
Moreover
, you will make new relationships with students same as your situation which will make it easy to practice with them.
However
, with the new methods we can learn the
language
from
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, videos and apps that provide instructors. In conclusion, there
is
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alot
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a lot
of methods to learn
new
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language
even if it is in your country by
keeping
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practicing
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it, watching
video
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or listening to podcasts.
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task achievement
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general
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present and serve their purpose well. You provide a clear opinion in the introduction and summarize it well in the conclusion.
task achievement
You use relevant examples to support your points, which helps to make your argument more convincing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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