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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The data illustrate the proportion of
people
 who are 65
years
 old and above from 1940 to 2040 in three different countries.
Overall
, the number of
people
 aged
from
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65
years
 old and above has
been
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increased from 1940 to now and is projected to continue to
rise
 until 2040.
Additionally
,
Japan
 witnesses the highest
rise
 in
such
population
, starting at the lowest position among the three nations and ending with the highest figure. In 1940, the number of
people
 aged 65
years
 old and above in
USA
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the USA
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 composed almost 10% of the
population
 of
USA
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the USA
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, marking it the highest in the graph. Sweden landed as the second highest with approximately 8
percent
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,
while
Japan
 had the lowest with 5
percent
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. From there, the data
of
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USA
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the USA
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 and
Japan
 started rising to almost 15
percent
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 in 1980 for both countries. After 1980, the figure of
USA
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the USA
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 experienced a period of gradual decline before picking up in 2020 and is forecasted to reach close to a quarter of the
population
 in 2040. Sweden,
on the other hand
, kept rising from 1980 to reach a peak
at
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 2018, marking a fifth of the
population
;
then
, the data plummeted slightly until 2030, before being predicted to
rise
 again to reach exactly a quarter of the
population
.
Conversely
,
Japan
 stood
at
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the
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third place in the graph, seeing 5% of the
population
with
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people
from
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65
years
 old and above, in 1940. From there, the number slowly
decrease
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 to almost 2.5% in 1985 before increasing steadily to
estimatedly
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estimated
estimate
 reach 10
percent
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 in 2030. After that, the figure is expected to
rise
 sharply and peak at 25%, before gradually
increase
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 to 27.5% in 2040.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, rise, japan, population, usa, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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