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The two maps below show an island, before and after construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate how a desert
island
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 changed into an entertainment resort .
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 , it can be seen the biggest changes have occurred in the recreational and residential amenities ,
while
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agricultural
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the agricultural
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 zone has been
knock
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knocking
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 down over the given period . The first map
show
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shows
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 an empty
island
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 with no signs of life .The
island
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 was surrounded by sea and there
is
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was
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 a beach on the western part of the
island
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 and there
was
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were
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 some alone trees and palms.
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 after some time ,the
island
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 was reconstructed and residential buildings, restaurants and swimming areas
have been
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were
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 built.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 roads were paved for people and vehicles.
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Also
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 a pier was erected on the south end of the
island
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. The generally uninhabited
island
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 has been modernized into a luxury resort with all the amenities for tourists and for that ,no plants or trees were cut.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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