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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the global
pineapple
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 exports by major
pineapple
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 producers between 2009 and 2019.
Moreover
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, the pie chart demonstrates the costs that contributed to the
pineapple
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's price charged to the buyers in 2019. At first glance,
it is clear that
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country
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 A was the leading nation in 2019 surpassing
country
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B
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 as the previous leader
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a decade ago.
Furthermore
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, the cost of distribution and retail contributed the most
in
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 the pricing of one
pineapple
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. In regards to the production of
pineapple
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 based on the countries,
country
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 A began at far below 2 million metric tonnes,
while
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country
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B
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 started much
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more than twice higher, at above 4 metric tonnes, making it the highest exporter in 2009.
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, there were major shifts in the next decade, where
country
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 A overtook
country
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B
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 as the leader and skyrocketed to beyond 10 million metric tonnes,
whereas
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country
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B
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 collapsed.
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,
country
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 C remained relatively stable throughout the period. Regarding the breakdown of the cost, distribution and retail owned the biggest proportion, constituted 35%, followed by profit (18%), taxes (16%), and international transport (12%). Other costs, namely import licences, producer, and export costs, accounted for less than
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 of the price.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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