The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
number
of people who
were
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emigrated from England to five various countries during four
years
(2004 to 2007). It is evident that
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Australia was their most favourite destination.
However
, New Zealand and America were less popular.
According to
the data, around 40
thousand
people travelled to Australia in 2004 and 2005. Their
number
skyrocketed to more than 50
thousand
in 2006, which was the highest compared to the other
years
and nations. Followed by a little drop in 2007. The second selected country was Spain with more than 30
thousand
passengers from 2004 to 2006. In 2007
this
country saw a slight decrease, and less than 30
thousand
travelled to Spain. New Zealand and the USA had approximately the same
number
of visitors in the four mentioned
years
. Around 20
thousand
British citizens had chosen these two countries as their destination.
However
, America hosted less than 20
thousand
emigrants in 2005. France had a few
number
of travellers at the outset of the period, but their
number
doubled in 2005 and reached more than 30
thousand
, but it experienced a significant decrease in the
number
of visitors in the next two
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, years, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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