The bar chart shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of various household devices. Write a 150-word report for a university lecturer explaining the data and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart introduces
energy
usage(kwh
/year
) and its
expenses per Change the word
the
year
(in dollars
) of numerous technology devices
.
Overall
, Spa workers and users uses
electrical Change the verb form
use
devices
more than any other arrangement. Whereas
, the least consumed energy
belong
to the Electric Blankets.
Making deeper research, Change the verb form
belongs
eletctric
blankets, microwave Correct your spelling
electric
oven
and Fix the agreement mistake
ovens
televison
appliance uses no more than 250 Correct your spelling
television
kwh
and about 15 Correct your spelling
kWh
kW
dollars
per year
. Despite this
, each other everyday mechanisms expends
Verb problem
spend
approxiametly
1000 Correct your spelling
approximately
kwh
and 83 Correct your spelling
kWh
dollars
per year
. Although
, Pool Pump consumes 125 $ and 1500 kwh
per Correct your spelling
kWh
year
. While
its following, spa technology appliance - pump and heater- uses more than 2000 kwh
and over 180 $ per Correct your spelling
kWh
year
.
In summary, the bar chart illustrates the energy
usage (kWh
/year
) and corresponding expenses (in dollars
) of various technology devices
. Among all the arrangements, spa workers and users utilize electrical devices
the most, while
electric blankets consume the least amount of energy
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, kwh, year, dollars, devices with synonyms.
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