The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

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bar chart illustrates the percentage of British people spending

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charity

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based on their age within a period of 20 years, commencing from 1990.

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,the highest rate of age for giving

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charity

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can be observed from 36 to 50 in 1990

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the opposite can be seen for 18-25 in 2010. At the beginning of the period, the percentage of 18-25 was over 15% in 1990

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number increased moderately to get to 42 per cent for ages f36-50.

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, for the other two categories from 51 to above 65 can be seen the same amount above 30

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in 1990 and

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was nearly 38 per cent in 2010. In 1990, those aged

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18-50 had more tendency to spend

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in comparison with 2010.

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the lowest rate of spending

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in 2010 can be seen from 18 to 25, the highest rate of giving

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can be in 51-65age.

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The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

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