The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph illustrates the
rate
of young people
in higher education in four different countries
within in period of 10 years , commencing from 2000.
Overall
, the highest rate
of educated people
can be observed for country
D in 2010 while
the opposite can be seen for country
A in 2000.
According to
the diagram, country
A had the lowest rate
of individuals with a high level of education by
38% in 2000 and for all of the Change preposition
apply
countries
moderately increased during the period when it reaches
64% in 2000 Wrong verb form
reached
then
the same trend can be considered for all of the countries
in 2005 .they experienced gradually rise ,apart from brief decline for country
B to reach 41% . the number of young people
educated in 2010 significantly reduced by around 10% for countries
A,B,and Cwhile
the opposite can be found for other categories.Correct your spelling
C while
moreover
, Capitalize word
Moreover
country
B had lowest
Change the article
the lowest
rate
of educated people
from 41% to 46% in 2000,2005 and 2010.Submitted by salehmiri1995 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, people, countries, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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