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The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of young people in higher education in four different countries in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the
rate
 of young
people
 in higher education in four different
countries
 within in period of 10 years , commencing from 2000.
Overall
, the highest
rate
 of educated
people
 can be observed for
country
 D in 2010
while
 the opposite can be seen for
country
 A in 2000.
According to
 the diagram,
country
 A had the lowest
rate
 of individuals with a high level of education
by
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38% in 2000 and for all of the
countries
 moderately increased during the period when it
reaches
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reached
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 64% in 2000
then
 the same trend can be considered for all of the
countries
 in 2005 .they experienced gradually rise ,apart from brief decline for
country
 B to reach 41% . the number of young
people
 educated in 2010 significantly reduced by around 10% for
countries
 A,B,and
Cwhile
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C while
 the opposite can be found for other categories.
moreover
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Moreover
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,
country
 B had
lowest
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the lowest
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rate
 of educated
people
 from 41% to 46% in 2000,2005 and 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, people, countries, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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