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Last month you had a holiday overseas.Where you stay with some friends.They just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter your friends,in your letter. •thank them for the holiday and the photos •explain why do you didn't write earlier •invite them to come and stay with you

#month #holiday #friends #photos #•thank #•explain #•invite
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Hi,my friends. What's up? In my opinion, you are fine. I am glad to spend time with you. These were the most unforgettable moments of my life. I am so happy to see our
pictures
. These are
pictures
 really gorgeous
seeing
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. These
pictures
 made me want to spend time together again.These
pictures
 will always remind you. I feel guilty for not writing to you.I hope you are not disappointed.In light
of
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of this
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, there were problems in my personal
However
, now everything is fine.But now we always have to write. I have a good offer for you.I hope you like it.In short, I want to invite you to my hometown. I think
,
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 you will accept the offer.If you come we will have a good time here as before. I will wait for your answer. Sincerely Kamosh.
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure a smooth flow between ideas by using more transitional phrases.
task achievement
Elaborate a bit more on why you didn't write earlier to give a fuller explanation.
task achievement
Use a slightly more formal tone in the closing to match the context of the letter.
task achievement
You have effectively mentioned each of the three required points in the task.
coherence cohesion
You started and ended your letter with appropriate greetings and closings.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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