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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Micheal I hope
,
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this
 is my letter useful
for
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 you. New
Year
 is widely celebrated in my country. New
Year
's Eve is everywhere and it affects people differently. Everyone wishes and dreams in
New
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the New
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Year
. Again, they expect
gift
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a gift
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 from
Santa
Claus
. I guess,
New
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the New
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Year
 is important for people because there are silver
lining
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linings
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 in the New
Year
. Various festivals and celebrations are held in the New
Year
. Of
cource
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course
, fireworks too.
Everwhere
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 is decorated. The main thing is that New
Year
 doesn't pass without ''Olivia'' salad.
Delicous
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Delicious
 foods are cooked too. Like what, our national foods and others. New
Year
 comes at 00.00 o'clock. Everyone welcomes the New
Year
 in the family circle. It's really attractive. What I like the most about the New
Year
 is
forget
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forgetting
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 the events of the old
year
 and
step
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stepping
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 into
new
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a new
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 life. But I like taking gifts more. Every New
Year
's morning I
wait
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 gifts from
Santa
Claus
. Because I trust
Santa
Claus
. I think, most people believe
Santa
Claus
.
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coherence
Try to provide a clearer structure. Using paragraphs effectively helps improve readability and ensures that each main point is clearly presented.
cohesion
Ensure that all sentences are logically connected and that there is a smooth flow of ideas from one sentence to the next.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task clearly, including the importance of New Year, its celebration, and what you specifically enjoy about it.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly and appropriate tone, which suits the context of writing to a friend.
coherence
You have a friendly and clear opening and closing to your letter, which are very appropriate for the task.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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