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The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
percentage
 of variation in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008 in five countries
named
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apply
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Japan,
US
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the US
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,France,
UK
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the UK
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 and
Australia
.
Overall
,all countries except
Australia
 showed
decline
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a decline
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 in the
percentage
difference
 from 1978
to2008
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to 2008
.
Australia
 has presented
steady
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a steady
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 decline
upto
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up to
 1998 and rapid elevation from there to 2008. In 1978,both France and
Australia
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Australia's
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percentage
difference
is
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was
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 slightly below 20% which
has gone
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went
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 down steadily
upto
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up to
 1998.After 1998, it
was raised
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rose
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 above 20% in
Australia
 and France has
gone
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went
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 down slightly
more
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apply
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lower than the
level
 in 1978.
UK
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The UK
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 & US
has
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have
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showed
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shown
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the same pattern ,
although
 the initial
level
at
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in
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 1978 was below 30% in
UK
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the UK
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 and above 30% in
US
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the US
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.Both of these levels
has
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apply
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reached
to
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apply
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the almost same
level
 in 2008
that
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which
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 is slightly below the
level
 of earning
difference
 in
UK
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the UK
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in1978
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in 1978
. Japan has had the highest
percentage
difference
level
 of all countries which was
in
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apply
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between 45% to 50% in 1978.That has been declined to the
level
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little
liitle
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little
 bit more
then
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than
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 40% in the year of 2008
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, uk, australia, difference, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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