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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic gives us information about the changes
of
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 price by month of nickel, zinc and
cooper
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copper
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 during 2014.
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, nickel started with the highest
percentage
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 and finished with the lowest. Zinc
begun
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 with the
least
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lowest
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percentage
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 and finished with the greatest. the changes in the price of
cooper
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 were not significant during the year. In January, nickel had started
with
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 6% but, the prices went low until March
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 1%, the prices decreased
significatively
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significantly
 from May to June until -3 %,
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 in July the
percentage
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 increased to -1% and it remained stable until October and recovered during November and December with 1%. Zing started with the lowest
percentage
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 in January (1%), in February it went up to 3%,
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 went down until June with -1% and remained stable until October when increased the price reaching 2% in December. Cooper
begun
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with
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 2%, the prices came down until May
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 briefly increased to June and remained stable until October,
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 steadily recovered and reached 2% in December.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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