Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together,. while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion,

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assist individuals from various countries together,

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, others think that it is just a money wastage which should

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vital concerns. In my opinion,

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games

are necessary for subcontinents is more significant than

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opposing view. Adequate evidence is obtainable in order to substantiate the concept of

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these sports not only bring the nations together but

also

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promotes the pace of tourism and e-commerce

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fact that all countries would become a global village where individuals can either buy or sell anything in the world. Despite

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industry would directly accelerate the Gross National Income of the country which helps in the growth and development of constituencies in myriad aspects. Another unquestionable panacea is Olympics act as a sense of motivation for young ones. because these

games

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participation activity in different sports which assist youth to bring up their hidden talent

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to distinguish that these worldwide

games

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only a

wastage

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of resources like money and time rather than

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the priority problems like

poverty

and unemployment. To commence with,

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of people deem that the root problems which resist in country's growth and development

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poverty

and unemployment. If authorities try

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their essential resources in

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rather than to state the level of

poverty

and unemployment results in

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a negative image of government in the eyes of their inhabitants. People could not exit from the circle of

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line and generations to generations might suffer from

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, administrations should take

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actions to allocate the resources

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priority issues so that it helps in nation's wealth. To recapitulate,

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core issues

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attention on

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level

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,

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my opinion, factors like tourism and e-commerce

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be neglected.