Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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reading and writing.
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that like, to make a great invention to help poor
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using computers and mobile phones of individuals.
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Furthermore
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good work for young
people
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and children, and don't make more
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