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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the bar chart is information pertaining to the imported
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in four various nations. The measurements were in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
UK
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the UK
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 imported
tea
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 the most rather than
coffee
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.
In addition
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, Canada and
US
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the US
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 had the same figures for the amount of both
tea
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 and
coffee
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. Looking at the figures in
UK
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the UK
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,
tea
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 accounted for exactly 80
thousand
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tonnes
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 which was widely higher than
in
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apply
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coffee
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 over two times
by
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apply
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30
thousand
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tonnes
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. In Germany,
coffee
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 stayed at 50
thousand
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tonnes
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,
where
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whereas
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the
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apply
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imported
tea
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 just accounted for approximately 41
thousand
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tonnes
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 lower compared to
coffee
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. Moving onto the Canada and US where they almost imported
tea
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 and
coffee
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at
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of
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 20
thousand
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 and 40
thousand
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tonnes
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 respectively.
However
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, the figure for
US
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the US
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 was quite higher than in Canada by roughly one
thousand
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tonnes
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, tonnes, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import/export
  • commodity
  • metric tons
  • comparative
  • trend
  • data
  • statistics
  • significant
  • notable
  • figure
  • country-specific
  • bulk
  • graph/chart
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • fluctuate
  • dominant
  • minor
  • contrast
  • analyze
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