Buying things on the internet such as book, air ticket and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages.

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There is no doubt that these days online shopping

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become

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the

largest platform to sell and buy things

such

book

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,clothes and groceries.

buying

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things online

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a several

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lead to advantages and disadvantages,

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depend

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on the buyer and his own needs. In terms of

shooping

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shopping

online some people choose online shopping because they

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lazy to go and do it

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the real world

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mall

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the clothes store next door so they

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choose

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to do it online because its easier and they don't have to walk on there feet or make any effort to go shopping.

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,some people choose to shop online

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because

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have

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to go to the mall or any store to get what they

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, it

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work or travel a lot,busy with

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,full day in the office,so the choose to do online shopping g to save

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and it's a great way to mange there needs and

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. We could say, that shopping

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online

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a lot of benefits like saving

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options and could

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in a

small

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time

and very fast. It could be

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already lazy and always choose the

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real

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Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping.

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You have provided relevant reasons why people might choose to shop online, such as convenience and time-saving.

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Your essay touches on important aspects such as the impact on behavior and time management.

Fully explain your ideas

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

242 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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