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Buying things on the internet such as book, air ticket and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages.

#internet #book #air #ticket #groceries
There is no doubt that these days online shopping
have
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 become
tha
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the
 largest platform to sell and buy things
such
 as
book
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books
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,clothes and groceries.
buying
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Buying
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 things online
have
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 a several
point
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can
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 lead to advantages and disadvantages,
deepind
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depend
deepened
 on the buyer and his own needs. In terms of
shooping
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shopping
 online some people choose online shopping because they
too
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are too
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 lazy to go and do it
on
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in
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 the real world
such
 as going to
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the
 mall
ore
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or
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 the clothes store next door so they
chosse
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choose
chose
 to do it online because its easier and they don't have to walk on there feet or make any effort to go shopping.
On the other hand
,some people choose to shop online
beacuse
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because
 they
dont
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do not
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 have
time
 to go to the mall or any store to get what they
needs
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, it
deepnd
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depend
depends
 on
there
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their
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 work or travel a lot,busy with
meeting
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meetings
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,full day in the office,so the choose to do online shopping g to save
time
 and it's a great way to mange there needs and
time
. We could say, that shopping
ng
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apply
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online
have
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 a lot of benefits like saving
time
,
more
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and more
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 options and could
helpful
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be helpful
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 in a
small
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short
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time
 and very fast. It could be
harm
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 for
the
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apply
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people
who's
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who are
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 already lazy and always choose the
most easy
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easiest
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 way and fast to match with
there
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their
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 real
behave
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.
there
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 is not much of
disvantag
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disadvantage
 a lot in online
shooping
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shopping
 as much as it could ld be
helpful
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a helpful
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 and effective way to save
time
.
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Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping.
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You have provided relevant reasons why people might choose to shop online, such as convenience and time-saving.
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Your essay touches on important aspects such as the impact on behavior and time management.

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