The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar illustrates the
numbers
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of
tea
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and coffee
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that comes
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comes
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come
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from
Canada
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, The US, The
UK
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,and Germany. In the beginning,the
tea
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imported to The
UK
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has the highest
amount
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of these four countries which show 4 times from
Canada
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and The US.The
amount
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of teas imported to The
UK
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is 80000
in
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apply
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Tonnes
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.
Secondly
Linking Words
, the
tea
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imported to Germany only shows the
half
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apply
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amounts
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amount
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of
tea
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to The
UK
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which only imported 40000 in
Tonnes
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. The graph shows the same
numbers
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of
tea
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import
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imports
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in The US and
Canada
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. The
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numbers
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number
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is 20000. Talking about
Caffee
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Coffee
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in these 4 countries,the imported
amount
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of coffee is totally different from
tea
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. In Germany,coffee has 50000 in
Tonnes
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which is the highest in these 4 countries. The US and
Canada
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illustrates
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illustrate
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the same
numbers
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of imported
caffee
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coffee
which is 4000
in
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apply
show examples
Tonnes
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. The lowest
amount
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is The
UK
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that
caffee
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coffee
imported to the
UK
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only 30000 in
Tonnes
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, tea, canada, uk, amount, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • import/export
  • commodity
  • metric tons
  • comparative
  • trend
  • data
  • statistics
  • significant
  • notable
  • figure
  • country-specific
  • bulk
  • graph/chart
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • fluctuate
  • dominant
  • minor
  • contrast
  • analyze
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