The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar illustrates the
numbers
of
tea
and coffee
Correct pronoun usage
that comes
show examples
comes
Correct subject-verb agreement
come
show examples
from
Canada
, The US, The
UK
,and Germany. In the beginning,the
tea
imported to The
UK
has the highest
amount
of these four countries which show 4 times from
Canada
and The US.The
amount
of teas imported to The
UK
is 80000
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Tonnes
.
Secondly
, the
tea
imported to Germany only shows the
half
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
amounts
Fix the agreement mistake
amount
show examples
of
tea
to The
UK
which only imported 40000 in
Tonnes
. The graph shows the same
numbers
of
tea
import
Fix the agreement mistake
imports
show examples
in The US and
Canada
. The
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
is 20000. Talking about
Caffee
Correct your spelling
Coffee
show examples
in these 4 countries,the imported
amount
of coffee is totally different from
tea
. In Germany,coffee has 50000 in
Tonnes
which is the highest in these 4 countries. The US and
Canada
illustrates
Change the verb form
illustrate
show examples
the same
numbers
of imported
caffee
Correct your spelling
coffee
which is 4000
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Tonnes
. The lowest
amount
is The
UK
that
caffee
Correct your spelling
coffee
imported to the
UK
only 30000 in
Tonnes
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, tea, canada, uk, amount, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import/export
  • commodity
  • metric tons
  • comparative
  • trend
  • data
  • statistics
  • significant
  • notable
  • figure
  • country-specific
  • bulk
  • graph/chart
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • fluctuate
  • dominant
  • minor
  • contrast
  • analyze
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