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Overpopulation is a big issues what are the effects?and how to resolve them?

#overpopulation #effects
Over time number of habitats around the world has increased drastically which raised the voices of experts who are afraid of
depletion
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 of supplies and natural resources on the earth.In my humble opinion,I think that overpopulation is a very critical problem,which has
side-effects
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 that can not be easily managed.
To begin
 with,there are a lot of problems concerning the over carrying capacity which includes; traffic congestion, pollution,unemployment and urbanization.
In other words
, folks'
number
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increases
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 and
affects
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 all aspects of our daily lives starting with traffic and ending up with the consumption of all resources on earth.
For instance
,India is one of the biggest cities in the world with enormous natural resources but
due to
 overcapacity,they cannot meet the basic human needs of every habitat.What can be said is that
the
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overpopulation causes a lot of damage to people
as well as
 the environment.
However
,there is a global social awareness to alleviate the issue on a global scale starting with the developing countries which hold most of the responsibilities compared to developed countries which have taken the hardest step by controlling the birth rate.An eminent example is Germany where the birth rate changed from positive to negative which means they no longer have a problem with the increased
of
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population.
To conclude
,After discussing the issue ,it can be said that the global population number
cause
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causes
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 numerous issues to be resolved easily.So it is the duty of individuals and the government to find a solution
otherwise
, the effect can be catastrophic.
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task response
Provide a clearer and more structured introduction that clearly states your position and outlines your main points.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of ideas by using more linking words and phrases to connect your thoughts.
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Be sure to provide more detailed explanations and examples to thoroughly support your main points.
coherence cohesion
Work on consistency in spacing and punctuation to improve the overall readability of the essay.
task achievement
You have identified several key issues caused by overpopulation, such as traffic congestion, pollution, unemployment, and urbanization, showing a clear understanding of the problem.
task achievement
You have included relevant and specific examples to support your points, such as the situation in India and Germany.
coherence cohesion
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and each paragraph addresses a specific aspect of the problem or solution.

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