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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services. Write at least 150 words.
#minutes #show #results #survey #university #students #services
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time
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part-time
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time
student
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students
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university
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the university
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 library .
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part -
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while
 the opposite can be observed for
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. The current
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students
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 accounted for 72%
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 was 67% and the percentage of
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around
 22% per
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is 10
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% lower than
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 in other categories.
moreover
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, a
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majority
 of people have the best feel with It support for
full
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time
student
 around 55%
whereas
 just over one fifth have
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student
.
furthermore
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proportion
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time
 and
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full-time
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time
student
 32% and 35% respectively. a
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 of
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students
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not
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do not
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 spend any
time
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 the same amount can be seen for
part
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, time, student with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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