One of your penfriends wants to improve his/her english in advance of moving to sydney Write a letter to your penfriend. Advise him/her about the following: listening skills, speaking skills and vocabulary.

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Dear Mr James, I

had

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have

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gone through your letter in which you

had

Unnecessary verb

apply

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mentioned

to improve

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improving

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your

English

language skills.

English

language

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a language

the language

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which you can learn by observation too. You need to start improving your

English

language listening skills. So that you can understand what

other

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others

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is saying to you. It will help you

in interacting

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interact

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with people in Sydney.

In addition

to that, start working on your grammar particularly tenses,

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and subject

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subject verb

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subject-verb

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agreement so that you can speak correct

English

. By focusing on speaking skills like grammar soon you will develop confidence to speak correct

English

. It will help you in Speaking

skill

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skills

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Finally

, try to improve vocabulary by learning

English

words for

day-today

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day-to-day

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items like vegetables, transport,

electronics

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and electronics

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and improve on

vocab

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vocabulary

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. It will give you

confidence

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the confidence

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to express yourself better in tricky situations. I hope my suggestion will help you. Yours Sincerely, Jay Mark

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Coherence and Cohesion

Try to use more transitional phrases to enhance the flow between paragraphs and make the logical structure clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on using varied sentence structures to improve the fluency and readability of your letter.

Task Achievement

The letter addresses all the main points: listening skills, speaking skills, and vocabulary.

Task Achievement

The tone of the letter is friendly and encouraging, which is suitable for writing to a penfriend.

Coherence and Cohesion

Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the letter organized and easy to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion

The opening and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

148 words

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One of your penfriends wants to improve his/her english in advance of moving to sydney Write a letter to your penfriend. Advise him/her about the following: listening skills, speaking skills and vocabulary.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush. What are the reasons for this? Is the decline in writing by hand a positive or negative development?

Some think that governments should support retired people financially while others believe they should take care of themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that universities shold only accept students with the highest marks while others believe that some students with low marks should have an opportunity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that punishment is the best way of teaching children to behave well. Others believe that it is better to reward children for good be haviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some companies prefer people to work in the office, while others facilitate their employees to work from home. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.