Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Throughout history,

fashion

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always

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to suitable with

people

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's vision so individuals tend to own

newest

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dresses. It can be expensive for some

people

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however

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others suppose that vogue is very essential,

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its cost is affordable. In

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essay, I will discuss

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the two above opinions. First and foremost, It is undeniable that model fashions have high

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, even though the cost of dresses are more expensive than luxury objects

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house

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car

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, etc... The

value

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clothes

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includes brand,

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designer

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popularity and raw materials. In reality, expensive fashions usually are made

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high

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value

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raw materials and they are created by famous

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designers

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deginers

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designers

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value

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of them by attaching rare accessories to the outfit.

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some

people

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can face with lots of

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difficulties

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in buying

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luxury

clothes

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, others believe that it is acceptable because

fashion

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is an

undispensable

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indispensable

part of their life. The rich, who have a passion

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the modelest

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modelest

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model

style,

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willing

on paying

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lots of money to buy limited items. Not only

these

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clothes

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help them feel comfortable, but it

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is a part of their work.

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, famous actors and singers always appear with their best pictures.

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, they usually buy expensive dresses

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a requirement of audiences. In

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condition, fans can support

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the decision of famous

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. In conclusion,

fashion

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can

less

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important or very vital for individuals, which

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with

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their work,

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and salary. From my point of view, I assume that users should choose suitable

clothes

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, which make them feel comfortable.

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medthod

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fashion

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bring

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several benefits to everyone.

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grammar

Work on reducing grammatical and spelling errors to improve clarity. For instance, 'deginers' should be 'designers' and 'undispensable' should be 'indispensable'.

elaboration

Try to expand on the points with more detailed examples and deeper analysis. For instance, include an example of an expensive fashion item and its impact on both an individual's life and the society.

cohesion

Use linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. Words like 'additionally', 'conversely', and 'similarly' can help in this regard.

balanced argument

The essay provides a balanced view on the topic, discussing both opinions fairly.

introduction conclusion

The introduction and conclusion are clearly present and offer a comprehensive overview of the topic.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

270 words

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Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Others say that this is acceptable because fashion is an important part of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In a number of counties, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?

You are going for a one-week vacation and your friend agreed to stay at your place while you are away. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, you should: thank her/him and tell the dates of your holiday explain how he/she enters the house describe what you expect him/her to do.