Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railway and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Due to
the fast pace of life ,most of the families are dual-incom
Correct your spelling
dual-income
who
Correct word choice
and
needs
better infrastructure to commute daily.So many individuals believe that it is important to have more finances to improve infrastructure Correct subject-verb agreement
need
such
as build
more Wrong verb form
building
roads
and motorways,instead
of spending money on public transport
.I totally disagree with this
point of view and the following paragraphs will discuss it.
Firstly
,in this
present era
people prefer to live in big cities Add a comma
era,
that
leads to congestion in these areas.Correct pronoun usage
which
Moreover
everyone has to use Add a comma
Moreover,
transport
to reach their work place
,but only Correct your spelling
workplace
few
of them are able to afford their own vehicles .Change the article
a few
For example
,in India
almost 80 Add a comma
India,
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
their
population Change the word
the
used
public Wrong verb form
uses
transport
to travel
daily .Secondly
,if more individuals use their private cars ,there will be huge carbon emission
,Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
as a result
country
will face Correct article usage
the country
Correct article usage
the worst
worst
air Correct word choice
worse
polloution
.To overcome these issues Correct your spelling
pollution
government
need to promote trains and tram Correct article usage
the government
system
,so more people can Fix the agreement mistake
systems
travel
at the same time with less fuel consumption as well as
ecofriendly
Correct your spelling
eco-friendly
transport
.
On the other hand
,building new roads
and motorways means the
better infrastructure of a state,and it indicates Correct article usage
a
the
Correct article usage
a
stronge
economy of a nation.Correct your spelling
strong
stronger
Such
as by providing better ways to travel
by road ,this
attracts more tourists Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct word choice
and that
that
in return Correct pronoun usage
apply
promote
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promotes
economy
of the country .Add an article
the economy
an economy
Moreover
people can Add a comma
Moreover,
travel
fastly from one city
to another that
Correct pronoun usage
which
inhance
cultural norms between different areas and Correct your spelling
increases
create
more Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
oppertunities
for employment,but it can lead to congestion ,excessive environmental pollution and more fuel consumption.Correct your spelling
opportunities
For instance
,Correct article usage
the roads
roads
structure of Change the noun form
road
a
Correct article usage
the
city
Change preposition
in lahore
lahore
in Pakistan has Change the capitalization
Lahore
been
improved Unnecessary verb
apply
from
Change preposition
since
last
Correct article usage
the last
decad
,more persons are able to Correct your spelling
decade
travel
at the same time, that is
a good development but as a result
that city
has became
the world's most polluted Change the verb form
become
city
.
To conclude
,although
the
Correct article usage
apply
roads
and motorways are important for economy
,public Add an article
the economy
transport
is the basic facility that very
citizen Correct your spelling
every
need
to Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
travel
.However
improving Add a comma
However,
railway
system that completely Correct article usage
a railway
run
on steam is Change the verb form
runs
enviormentally
friendly .So working on Correct your spelling
environmentally
motorway
has more Add an article
a motorway
the motorway
drawback
.Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
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