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A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/She has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • give details of the course you took at the university • explain why you recommend the university • give some advice about how to apply

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Dear David, I hope you’re well. I’m writing to share you with more details about the
course
, the
university
, and the application process.
First,
I will give some details about the
course
. I took the
course
last
 term, and it focused on financial analysis. There are two sessions of
this
course
. The first session is at 8 o’clock, and the other is from 5 to 9 p.m. Most students choose the second one because they can’t get up early.
Also
, the
course
 consists of four group projects, and I believe you will make lots of friends in projects.
Secondly
, the
university
 is amazing as well. They will hold business competitions each month, which can help students leverage class knowledge practically.
In addition
, the career
center
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 at our
university
 is helpful. It provides students with internship opportunities, helping them prepare well after graduation.
Finally
, to apply for the
course
, you must check the session vacancy on the
university
 website. Afterwards, you have to fill out the registration form and submit it to the student office before the deadline. I hope you can
enroll
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 in the
course
 successfully, and please don’t hesitate to ask any questions. Best regards, Jiacheng Ding
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task achievement
Consider providing more detailed information about your personal experience in the course to make your recommendation more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
While the letter is well-organized, try to connect your points with smoother transitions to enhance the flow of the text.
task achievement
You have addressed all parts of the task comprehensively and provided specific details about the course, the university, and the application process.
coherence cohesion
The closing and greeting are appropriately used, adding a personal touch to the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, contributing to the clarity and structure of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prospective student
  • alma mater
  • curriculum
  • faculty
  • state-of-the-art
  • extramural
  • scholarly pursuits
  • cohort
  • accreditations
  • holistic development
  • pedagogy
  • thesis
  • dissertation
  • prerequisites
  • mentorship
  • application portal
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • internship opportunities
  • networking events
  • career services
  • personal statement
  • deadline
  • admissions office
  • recommendation letters
  • portfolio
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