The chart below gives information about the journeys to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the journeys to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how children aged 11 to 16 in the UK commuted to school in a year.
Overall
, the majority of children chose to walk or cycle for
journeys
that were 2 miles or shorter
while
buses
were the most common options for those who
traveled
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longer distances. Regarding commutes under 1 mile, walking accounted for 90% of
such
journeys
, surpassing the figure for bicycles by 40%.
Cars
and
buses
were less
favored
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for
this
distance, each accounting for less than 10% of total
journeys
. In the 1-2-mile range, cycling emerged as the most popular choice, making up approximately 75% of total
journeys
. 60% of
journeys
in
this
category belonged to those who walked, triple the figure for
cars
and six times as high as that for
buses
. Concerning
journeys
within the 2-to-5-mile range,
buses
took the lead with 50%, closely followed by bicycles at about 47%. Coming in third and fourth place were
cars
and walking, at approximately 31% and 25% respectively. Moving onto commutes over 5 miles,
buses
remained the preferred choice, with around 70%, followed by
cars
at 21%,
while
walking and cycling were not chosen for
this
distance.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words journeys, buses, cars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • mode of transport
  • notable trends
  • time period
  • environmentally friendly
  • demographic factors
  • private car
  • public bus
  • safety concerns
  • main findings
  • travel patterns
  • comparing
  • highlight
  • proportion
  • reflecting
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