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The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future.

The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future.
The given blueprint illustrates the present and the future layout of an office
builiding
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building
.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the green space will be converted into public areas that
use
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are used
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 to meet the demands of customers.
Additionally
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of rooms and facilities will
experiences
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experience
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 the relocation. Beginning with the modification, the entrance is the most
noticable
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noticeable
 point where it is expected to relocate from the right
side
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 to the
center
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centre
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 of the building. Regarding the left
side
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 of
this
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builing
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building
, four small offices will be
consodilated
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consolidated
 into a couple of larger offices, located
in
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on
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 both
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side
Change to a plural noun
sides
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 of the entrance.
Beside
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Besides
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 that, the grassland will be upgraded into an outdoor seating area
in addition
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 to many chairs. The kitchen and canteen adjacent to it will be
also
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 turned into 2 other bigger offices. Moving to the remaining
side
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 of the building, the other grassland here is likely to be constructed into 2
seperated
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separate
separated
 areas. To be more specific, the top right corner of
this
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 green space will be replaced by a café with a coffee machine.
Furthermore
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, the WCs which
is
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are
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 next to the grassland will be
also
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 removed
to
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from
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 the coffee zone. With respect to the bottom one, a meeting
areas
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area
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 is going to be built,
along with
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 having extra chairs,
However
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, despite many changes, the storeroom will be unaltered.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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