The maps show the changes of an office building between the present and the future.

The given blueprint illustrates the present and the future layout of an office

builiding

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building

Overall

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, it can be seen that the green space will be converted into public areas that

use

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are used

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to meet the demands of customers.

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majority

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the majority

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of rooms and facilities will

experiences

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experience

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the relocation. Beginning with the modification, the entrance is the most

noticable

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noticeable

point where it is expected to relocate from the right

side

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to the

center

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centre

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of the building. Regarding the left

side

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this

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builing

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building

, four small offices will be

consodilated

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consolidated

into a couple of larger offices, located

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both

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side

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of the entrance.

Beside

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that, the grassland will be upgraded into an outdoor seating area

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to many chairs. The kitchen and canteen adjacent to it will be

also

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turned into 2 other bigger offices. Moving to the remaining

side

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of the building, the other grassland here is likely to be constructed into 2

seperated

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separate

separated

areas. To be more specific, the top right corner of

this

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green space will be replaced by a café with a coffee machine.

Furthermore

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, the WCs which

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are

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next to the grassland will be

also

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removed

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from

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the coffee zone. With respect to the bottom one, a meeting

areas

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area

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is going to be built,

along with

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having extra chairs,

However

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, despite many changes, the storeroom will be unaltered.

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