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The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
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The
given
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bar graph gives data on the parents in an
areas
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area
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 expenditure for weekly salary over a period 50-year from 1986 to 2018. It can be seen from the graph that the spending
for
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on
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 food in 1986
higher
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was higher
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 than
others section
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other sections
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. At the
begin in
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beginning
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 the personal goods of families had hit the lowest point after 50 years. In terms of payment for housing significantly increased from 10
percent
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 in 1986 to 19 units in 2018. The figure spent
of
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on
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 household goods still
stay
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 the same.
Conversely
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, the number of transport
rocket
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rockets
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 approximately 11
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percent
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per cent
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 between 1986 and 2018. Regarding
in
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apply
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the
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debt their weekly income
about
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in
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 leisure hat hit the highest point
about
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of about
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 13
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percent
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per cent
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. Looking at the chart more closely, we can see food
play
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plays
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an
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apply
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important in
family
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the family
a family
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, it is evident that the count for food rapidly declined with 35 and 17
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percent
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per cent
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 for 1986 and 2018 respectively.
Overall
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, the quantity
fuel
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of fuel
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 and power and personal goods downward trend substantially.
Besides
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, the total sector’s clothing and footwear
decrease
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decreased
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 from 10 to 5
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percent
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per cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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