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The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
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The
given
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bar graph gives data on the parents in an
areas
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area
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 expenditure for weekly salary over a period 50-year from 1986 to 2018. It can be seen from the graph that the spending
for
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on
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 food in 1986
higher
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was higher
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 than
others section
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other sections
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. At the
begin in
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beginning
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 the personal goods of families had hit the lowest point after 50 years. In terms of payment for housing significantly increased from 10
percent
 in 1986 to 19 units in 2018. The figure spent
of
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on
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 household goods still
stay
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 the same.
Conversely
, the number of transport
rocket
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rockets
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 approximately 11
percent
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per cent
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 between 1986 and 2018. Regarding
in
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apply
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the
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debt their weekly income
about
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in
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 leisure hat hit the highest point
about
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of about
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 13
percent
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per cent
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. Looking at the chart more closely, we can see food
play
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plays
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an
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apply
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important in
family
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the family
a family
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, it is evident that the count for food rapidly declined with 35 and 17
percent
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per cent
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 for 1986 and 2018 respectively.
Overall
, the quantity
fuel
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of fuel
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 and power and personal goods downward trend substantially.
Besides
, the total sector’s clothing and footwear
decrease
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decreased
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 from 10 to 5
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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