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Some people believe that it is better for students learning language in small classes. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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Studying in small
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Although
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 a number of facilities
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 as individual attention, more feedback and so on, I accept that big
classes
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 allow
learners
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interract
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interact
 with other
language
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learners
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. Learning
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language
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have
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 numerous
adventages
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advantages
. Small
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 could make
effective
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 learning environment for
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As a result
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, learning
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language
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 would be much more interesting and easy. In small
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, teachers can work individually with each student.
Consequence
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,
students
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 can give more feedback from teachers about their homework. Another
adventages
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advantage
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 is that there is
lower
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 noise in small
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 rather than
big
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, in the UK, every
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insist
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 of only 7 or 8
students
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,
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 it can help
students
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 to learn
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 through interesting games and they get so great results.
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, studying in small
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effective
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 way to learn
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language
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On the other hand
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,
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interaction
 is important in learning
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foriegn
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foreign
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to
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language
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learners
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 more communication with other
students
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. It is a great chance
them
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 to exchange ideas, effective learning methods, formal vocabulary, new words and other information.
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 of the big
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 cost. On top of
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during
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 studying in small
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students
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 can improve their vocabulary, ideas,
comprehention
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comprehension
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also
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 self-confidence.
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,
student
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, who
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language
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the
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small
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Therefore
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, learning
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language
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a language
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 in big
classes
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 may be better for
students
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. In conclusion, learning
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language
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 might be effective in small
classes
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,
however
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, communication is important in learning
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language
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. So it is better for
students
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 to learn
language
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 in big
classes
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grammar
Make sure to correct minor grammatical errors and typos to ensure clarity and precision. For instance, 'adventages' should be 'advantages' and 'interraction' should be 'interaction'.
clarity
Clarify and further elaborate on some points for better comprehension. For example, specify how the individual attention in small classes leads to better learning outcomes, and provide more specific examples or studies to support your claims.
development
Ensure all ideas are fully developed and supported. Some points, such as the cost comparison between big and small classes, need more substantial evidence or explanation.
content
Your essay provides a balanced view by discussing both the benefits of small classes and the advantages of larger ones. This demonstrates a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
structure
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, clearly stating your stance and summarizing your arguments.
cohesion
You have used linking words and phrases such as 'on the other hand' and 'thus' effectively to guide the reader through your arguments.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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