the two pie charts below show the online shopping shakes for retail sectors in Canada in 2055 and 2010
These
given
pie charts illustrate four different retail categories sold online in proportion, include: Verb problem
apply
electronics&Appliance
, food& beverage, Correct your spelling
appliance
home
furnishings and video
games
.
Firstly
, in 2005, Electronics & appliance
predominated the whole kinds of products, with more than a third of the total. Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
While
it had a decline of 5% to 30% in 2010, but
it was still the second Correct word choice
apply
popular
option to choose. Correct quantifier usage
most popular
In addition
, Home
furnitures
accountedChange the wording
furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
a
quarter of the total in 2005, Change preposition
for a
however
, it decreased significantly to 15% by 2010, indicating the change channels of home
furnishings’
selling.
Change noun form
furnishings
Secondly
, food&beverage and video
games
constituted less than the other two products, with 22% and 18%, respectively, while
after
5 years later, food%beverage increased dramatically to 32%, and Change preposition
apply
video
games
rose to approximately a quarter(23%), which means the requirement of these two kinds of products varied positively.
To sum up
, the consumption of electronics&Appliance
and Correct your spelling
electronics and appliances
home
furnishings had
been not Wrong verb form
has
that
essential Correct word choice
as
than
before, Change preposition
as
in contrast
, the increasing
Replace the word
increase
of
Change preposition
in
food&beverage
and Correct your spelling
food and beverage
video
games
indicate
people transformed concepts of recreation and food.Correct subject-verb agreement
indicates
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