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The chart and table below given information about tourist at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below given information about tourist at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart and table compare the number of
tourists
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 from 4 distinct sectors to
Australia
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,
while
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presented
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presents
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 information about
main
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the main
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 activity, accommodation and staying
in
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here.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most of
tourists
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 come from
US
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the US
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 and the smallest indicate is from Asia.
European
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tourists
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 stay the most
day
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days
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.
According to
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 the chart, the number of
Asian
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tourists
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 who come to
Australia
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 is at 10%. The biggest proportion of
visitors
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 to
Australia
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 is
at
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37% from Europe.
Moreover
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, the percentage of US
shows
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 nearly
at
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35%
while
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 individuals from other countries are about
at
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18%. From the table,
European
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tourists
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 display the longest stay in
Australia
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approximetly
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approximately
 16 days. The second longest figure is about 14
day
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days
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 from
American
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the American
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 people.
Asian
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visitors
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 and other regions'
visitors
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 are almost the same, 7 and 10 days. In terms of accommodation,
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European
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Europe
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 and other countries people prefer to stay
at
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camping and caravan during their travel to
Australia
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. But
Asian
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 and American
visitors
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 choose to live in a 5-star hotel and
4-star
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a 4-star
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 hotel, respectively.
Moreover
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,
Asian
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 and American people like sightseeing.
However
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,
European
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tourists
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 love to swim and
sunbath
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sunbathe
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 in
Australia
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 and
tourists
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 from other places like to do surfing as a main activity.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, australia, european, asian, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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