the table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009.

the table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009.
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The table illustrates how many workers were employed in six different categories in Australia from 1989 to 2009.
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, it can be easily observed that the least labourers were employed in tourism during the entire period.
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, all industries witnessed an upward trend,
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the opposite was true for manufacturing and retailing.
To begin
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, in 1989, around 15% of the workforce was recruited in the manufacturing field, which was at the top of
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list, followed by retail, at 11.8%. After two decades, a significant decrease was seen in manufacturing, to 9.8%,
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retail experienced a slight decline, to 10.1%. Turning to the remaining statistics, in 1989, the proportion of employed labourers in health care and construction was 9.6% and 7.6% respectively, before rising slightly to 11.3% and 8.3% in 2009. Meanwhile, in 1989, there was a small difference between education and tourism, at 6.8% and 5.5%, and it was shortened in the following 20 years after an increase, at 7.5% and 7.3%.
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