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the maps shows a prsent layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopement.

the maps shows a prsent layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopement.
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Contain in 2 paragraphs is information is information pertaining to the change which
are
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 expected to take
place
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 at an
office
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 building. Generally speaking, both of the green horizons located
at
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on the edge of the
office
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 will be relocated by the outdoor sitting and meeting area in
future
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,
the
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and the
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 total number of
office
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room
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rooms
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 occurred that it will be increased significantly. Another interesting point is that
while
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 the storeroom
located
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 at
the
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its
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 original
place
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 all the time,
There
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 is a
disappear
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among
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 the kitchen and canteen in
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future
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the future
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 period. Looking
to
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 the given
further
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 detail, it is not essential to see that the entrance will
be move
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be moved
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 from the
place
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 near the bottom of the right sight to the middle of the
office
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 building. The numerous
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office
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offices
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 located through the lobby of the
office
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 will be combined together
occur
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to turn into the larger one located just near the left
site
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side
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 of the entrance .
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, in
future
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 the green area located on the edge of the left hand will be replaced by
out door
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outdoor
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 sitting areas,
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Moreover
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 both
of
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the kitchen and canteen will be demolished to take a
place
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 for two new
office
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room
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rooms
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.
Moreover
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, the storeroom will
nit
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not
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 be affected by any change and
then
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 will located in the original
located
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 in
future
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.
However
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, the
coffe
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coffee
 machine will be put between the storeroom and the wsc in the
future
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 time,
in addition
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 at the bottom of the right sight there is an
appear
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 of the new meeting room replace
for
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the old green area .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, office, future with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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