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Topic: The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment

Topic: The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment
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The provided illustrations outline changes that are proposed to take place in a building specially designed for
office
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 work in the future. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
this
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office
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 building
expected
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is expected
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 to witness a number of modifications, most significant of which include the disappearance of grasslands and food catering areas There is a big
entrance
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 next to
a
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grassland in the bottom right
part
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 of the building but at the same
time
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,
this
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entrance
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 is projected to be moved to the
center
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centre
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 of the southern side of the location. Meanwhile, four offices, which are next to the
entrance
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 in the south of the building, will be demolished to make way for two larger
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office
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offices
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 that
situated
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are situated
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to
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on
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 both sides of the
entrance
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. At the same
time
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, the kitchen and cafeteria in the northern
part
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 of the structure are anticipated to be replaced with
others
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other
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office
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room
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rooms
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. Regarding the outside
part
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 of the building, two grasslands located in the western and eastern direction of the place will be converted into an outdoor seating area and a meeting zone with several rows of chairs. The restroom which is placed next to the storeroom in the present
time
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, will be repositioned to the top left corner of the area, with a coffee machine right beside it. Other than those changes, the remaining facilities of the building
is
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comprising the
entrance
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 in the west direction and
warehouse
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the warehouse
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 situated in the
northern east
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northern-east
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part
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 of the land will remain intact during the period
time
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, entrance, part, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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