Some people say that what individuals do to protect cannot make a difference, others say that individuals can protect the environment. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Debates about whether the small effort of
people
in regard to protecting the environment matters,
raised a lot of arguments. Some say that individuals Remove the comma
apply
bare
Verb problem
bear
important
impact Correct article usage
an important
while
others think people
cannot affect much compared to the government, this
essay agrees with the former point of view.
In the first place, it may appear that the contributions of normal citizens might not be significant to the overall
outcome as the effort does minimal changes. However
, the actions and knowledge of one individual can spread to many more people
in the same area and will continue to uniform more from other places. And because of this
influence, over time, environmental
friendly habits would be widely applied by a big enough force that can ensure an important impact Change the adjective
environmentally
to
the earth. Change preposition
on
This
has happened across many countries and
especially Germany, where the recycling culture is considered seriously compared to anywhere else in the world.
To the latter point of view, critics Correct word choice
apply
argued
that even though the actions of residents can be used among cities, it is the regulations that actually take immense effect because industrial factories obey government rules only. Wrong verb form
argue
This
is a valid point, but they have not thought about the right of citizens to report about activities of such
companies if they are affecting the local greatness. With enough evidence and agreement among communities, about 100 signatures would be enough to make the authority
Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
be
aware Unnecessary verb
apply
about
certain problems. Change the preposition
of
Thus
, it ensures the influence of residents on the larger opponents that
are big corporations.
In the writer's own opinion, the action of individuals is a crucial part Correct pronoun usage
which
in
protecting the environment. Damage done to the environment is mostly Change preposition
of
due to
mass habits among people
, nonetheless
, it is also
the solution to problems. This
is due to
the specific aspects that require unionization between people
, like reducing private vehicle usage or using environmentally friendly materials.
Taking all points into consideration, people
are positive about the influence of individuals on society whereas
some say that the
Correct article usage
a
little
contribution cannot sway bigger stands like factories. Correct word choice
small
This
writer, despite the arguments, thinks people
can make a big difference to the state of Earth.Submitted by [email protected] on
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task achievement
Your essay provides a response to the task and addresses both views. However, you should aim to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and consistently link it back throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Try to ensure each paragraph has a single clear idea and flows logically from one to the next. Avoid jumping between points within a single paragraph without a smooth transition.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion effectively summarize the main points and provide a sense of closure to the essay. Your introduction is clear, but the conclusion could more strongly affirm your opinion.
coherence cohesion
To improve logical structure, use linking words and phrases more effectively to help the essay flow smoothly. For instance, connect your arguments with phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'On the other hand,' and 'As a result.'
task achievement
Your essay includes relevant examples, such as the mention of Germany's recycling culture, which strengthens your arguments.
task achievement
You clearly address both perspectives on the issue, which shows a balanced approach to the task.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?