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The maps show a present layout of an office building and plan for its future redevelopment.

The maps show a present layout of an office building and plan for its future redevelopment.
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Contained in the two blueprints is the information pertaining to change which will happen in an
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 Building in the future.
Overall
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, it is predicted that changes will occur to relocate the number of
Office
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rooms
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 and others
while
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 the expansion will be made to most
areas
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 outside.
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, the storeroom is the only structure to remain in place. Beginning with the outside
areas
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, where outdoor grass in the left-hand site will be demolished and replaced with seating
areas
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 and lots of chairs
whereas
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in
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on
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 the right-hand side, the grass area will be merged with the building and reconstructed. Concurrently, The entrance gate on the right will be set in the mid-bottom between
office
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rooms
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 in the future. Moving onto inside
areas
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, where kitchen and canteen will be converted to
office
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rooms
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while
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 two
office
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rooms
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 in the bottom will be enlarged between the entrance.
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, WCs will change the position to the top right corner next to the coffee machine, which just be added to the meeting area in the right corner of the
office
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 room.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, rooms, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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