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Band 2

Some exploration is too expensive and money should be spent on more important things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many people spend
money
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 on
space
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 exploration rather than spend on important things. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 idea and think that it is one of
important
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the important
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 parts
for
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of
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 our life.
Firstly
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, at the moment people use exhausted natural
energy
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 so it is necessary for
astronaut
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astronauts
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 to fly outer
space
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 to find and explore other
energy
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 that changes exhausted natural
energy
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.
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, petroleum is very necessary for transportation to operate but
in
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it
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 is nearly exhausted now that people need to find
this
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 in the universe to carry on service for transportation.
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, spending
money
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 on
space
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 exploration too much that astronaut’s
live
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lives
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 can jeopardy with weigh-less.
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,
energy
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 is
awatse
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a waste
 of
money
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 since it
products
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produces
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 no benefits for humans.
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, we need to repair
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space
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the space
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 shuttle and it
put
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costs
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money
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 too
much
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apply
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.
To sum up
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, the
write
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writer
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think
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thinks
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 spend
money
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space
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on space
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 exploration to develop for the Earth.

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Make sure to clearly state your position and maintain it throughout the essay. Specifying your points more clearly will strengthen your task response.
coherence cohesion
Work on making your points more logically connected. Sometimes, the transitions between ideas can be clearer. Using cohesive devices or transition words will help.
task achievement
Your essay should address counterarguments more effectively and offer clear reasons and examples to back up your position.
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Improving your grammar and vocabulary usage will help to convey your ideas more clearly and effectively.
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You have made an attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, which shows a good understanding of the topic's complexity.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, is clear and aids understanding.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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