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The table below shows the result of survey of first-year students who take courses in a particular university.

The table below shows the result of survey of first-year students who take courses in a particular university.
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Contained in the table is the information pertaining to the consequences of the survey of courses, which was recorded in the percentage of first-year students taking in a specific university during the
years
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 2000, 2005, and 2010. The units are measured in per cent per area.
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, the rate of teaching quality, print and electronic
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 saw an increase
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 the bracket of modules offered decreased and facilities remained the same.
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, print
resources
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 had the biggest percentage of students giving good ratings despite the least proportion of modules offered. Looking at the proportion of teaching quality, it experienced a downward trend in the first five
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, from 65% to 63%, before climbing up to 69% in 2010.
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, print
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 started at 84% in 2000
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 increased by 5% five
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 later and dropped to 88% after that. Moving on to the electronic
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 percentage, it recorded an upward trend from 45% in 2000 to nearly double
at the end
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 of the time scale.
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, the range of modules offered saw a decline from 32% to 27% after ten
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. Concurrently, the teaching facilities proportion remained the same at 77% during the timeframe.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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